As I contemplate this site
It seems to me it can't be right
That it and I are doomed by Fate
To pass as ships pass in the night.
What peevish wind it was that blew
Our ships off course I never knew
But somehow, lonely site of mine
We separated, me and you.
Can I be blamed? I cry--Heck, no!
I never would have willed it so!
The gods of fate must simply hate
This blog and I like billy-oh.
And is this world so full of pain
That I must leave my blog again?
(Which last line only rhymes if you
Are British and a Limey--ha!)
It seems to me it can't be right
That it and I are doomed by Fate
To pass as ships pass in the night.
What peevish wind it was that blew
Our ships off course I never knew
But somehow, lonely site of mine
We separated, me and you.
Can I be blamed? I cry--Heck, no!
I never would have willed it so!
The gods of fate must simply hate
This blog and I like billy-oh.
And is this world so full of pain
That I must leave my blog again?
(Which last line only rhymes if you
Are British and a Limey--ha!)
8 Comments:
I had to comment on this one myself, just 'cause it looked so lonely! I posted this on my blog shortly after I moved to Deux Ego (that was)--and since I'm back, it no longer applies!
Ah well...I guess it just wasn't meant to be included in the annals of classic poetry.
Eighth line: "me" should be "I"
Twelfth line: "I" should be "me"
Poets are not automatically exempt from the laws of grammar, though of course under poetic license they may ignore them if it is necessary, which it isn't here.
Selina Kahn
Thanks, Ms. Kahn :) I do know it's incorrect...and in a serious poem I would certainly take your words to heart and check grammar carefully. But since this was a nonsense poem, I didn't really care :)
Therefore in line 8 I chose the commonly-misused expression "me and you" over the more correct "you and I" (which wouldn't have rhymed, in any case)....and in line 12 I chose to use "I" instead of "me" because the rest of that stanza has "I" in it...and "me" would have stuck out like a sore thumb.
However, if I ever work it up into a serious piece of poetry, I'll keep your suggestions in mind ;)
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